During school on September 11 I experience a horrible day. During my gym period I was playing basketball. It was very
fun until that moment. That moment that humiliated me and made me feel so mortified.
In this moment a friend by the name of Drissa ascended and rose defying the
air, he then carried a basketball with two hands as if he was cradling a baby,
and then vigorously hurled the globe like sphere into the tranquil hoop. It
felt as if I was in a perplexed state of mind concerning the realization that
this man just dunked on me. I came back to reality to hear the voices and
shrieks of current witnesses of the incident. Imagine a 6’1 muscular guy
against a 5’3 – 5’4 guy. Exactly, ouch.
This post is a little strange. After reading the first few words, I had assumed you were going to start talking about 9/11 World Trade Center attacks. When what followed turned out to be about basketball, it was really off-putting as a reader. Rather than something truly tragic, your something horrible is really not that horrible. You should consider these things as you write. Read page 4 of the assignment again. Make sure you are following the logistics as outlined there.
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